Jump to content

Hamilton Cork, Famous Publisher Of Books


Hot Heart

Recommended Posts

"The air is so chilly I could cut through steel with these nipples of mine."

 

Atomsk, I applaud your efforts. It is not easy to open a novel with a line of speech. It can place so much emphasis on these words. You have done a wonderful job of establishing the atmosphere (chilly) and I detect this is the outlook of the entire story. This is a tale of adversity against harsh conditions; possibly one shared by at least two parties or just an exuberant individual. The speaker acknowledges these obstacles but revels in them, proudly boasting of the positives. I also suspect this may be some foreshadowing for an event later on where the character will triumph by performing the very task of which they spoke: slicing through steel with a hard and erect nipple. Some may call that hackneyed. I say modern literature has forgotten the power of a 'nipples slicing steel' moment and you may be the one to reawaken it.

 

There is, however, one problem that I feel may affect the novel as a whole. A lack of identity. One would presume the speaker is male but, heaven knows, I have made that mistake before. It would be wise to clarify who is doing the speaking.

 

Either way, I have decided to publish your book and will send along an advance of thirty euros. Don't spend it all at once.

Link to comment
Share on other sites

Archived

This topic is now archived and is closed to further replies.

×
×
  • Create New...